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Dystopia I -- Alliteration by ~krystalvalkyrie:iconkrystalvalkyrie:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Philosophical > Fixed




Podium, pedestal, pulpit, and poise—
Each will give rise to ineffable noise.

The calling, the culling, the cardinal crusade—
Selling ourselves to the idols we’ve made.

Sobriety censors the sorrows of some—
Delusions of empathy, soon to go numb.

Candyland, cannabis, crack cocaine—
Anything deeper is dubbed profane.

Penniless, partisan, pitiful pulp—
Why did we vanquish our notion of hope?
©2005-2009 ~krystalvalkyrie
:iconkrystalvalkyrie:

Author's Comments

This began in my Speech class as my mind wandered.
I suppose it went downhill from there.
It will be submitted because ES told me to upload poetry. :P

Inspired in part by Acts 17:23 and The Western Book of the Dead.

Please read this out loud.

-ksval-

Comments


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~RainShomet Jul 14, 2005, 12:27:54 AM
... Wow.

....

... Wow. .... Wow..

...

..

W.. wow.

Sir? Wow.

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~ I Am ~ I Know ~ I Love ~
:icongodslilturnish:
~GodsLilTurnish Jul 14, 2005, 8:01:32 AM
Excellent piece! :clap:

I read it aloud, and it definitely had more power that way. :wow: It's amazing anyway, but you know what I mean ;)

Very true and awe-inspiring message. *is still amazed*

You know what?

Insta-fav. :nod:

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I would rather see people in heaven with broken toes, because I stepped all over them, than see people in hell with perfect feet because I was too afraid of offending them.
:iconkrystalvalkyrie:
~krystalvalkyrie Jul 14, 2005, 12:04:55 PM
Thank you.
(I think. :confused: )
Thank you.

-ksval-

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"Not all who Wander are Lost." --JRRT
:iconkrystalvalkyrie:
~krystalvalkyrie Jul 14, 2005, 12:07:19 PM
Thank you.
I am glad someone read aloud.
It's something I think we could all do more of...
And of course for fav, Thank you.

-ksval-

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"Not all who Wander are Lost." --JRRT
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~EndersShadow Jul 14, 2005, 5:24:30 PM
DAMN its about time someone uploaded a rhyming poem with substance.

:boogie: this is fantastic! great flow and lovely message. absolutely wonderful!!

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Think of how stupid the average person is, and realize half of them are stupider than that.
George Carlin
:iconkrystalvalkyrie:
~krystalvalkyrie Jul 15, 2005, 12:06:31 AM
Thank you :)
Means much.

-ksval-

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"Not all who Wander are Lost." --JRRT
:icongodslilturnish:
~GodsLilTurnish Jul 16, 2005, 8:10:07 PM
No problem! I love the taste of poetry.

If that makes any sense.

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I would rather see people in heaven with broken toes, because I stepped all over them, than see people in hell with perfect feet because I was too afraid of offending them.
:icondangerbetsy:
~DangerBetsy Nov 30, 2005, 10:54:31 AM
**read it the first time out loud**
*low amazed whistle*

**reads it out loud again**
.......
dude

**reads it out loud again**
whoa.....

:wow:
that's neat, there is a really good flow to it, not awkward or anything.
I like it.

CD <><

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Your problem is not your problem
Your attitude about your problem is your problem.
:iconkrystalvalkyrie:
~krystalvalkyrie Nov 30, 2005, 11:58:23 AM
Thank you.
I much appreciate that.

(woot, another read-alouder ;) )

-ksval-

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"Not all who Wander are Lost." --JRRT
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